A wasted week?
Monday was past,
and the rest of the fast
and far flung week
among the seeking eyes
of other tries
I felt eclipsed.
I thought your lips
were kissed by more
impressive men.
And, I’d felt helpless
to compete with all the neat
and expert tongues,
which sung to you
a sweeter song,
than the one I had rehearsed.
And though my verse
was good enough
for one short night,
even then
the magic of our when
was gently rendered.
Passion surrendered
to the last of separate days
which passed before we met.
Where all my expectations
had yet to be fulfilled
and all my hopes
were stilled by strangeness,
and a fast approaching dawn.
Warning we would part,
before a start was ever truly made.
© James Rainsford 2011
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tight and passionate.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Happy Potluck!
This has such a melancholy note... I love the use of metaphor, the sensuality blended in with poetry and song in just the right measure.
ReplyDeletestilled by strangeness...I loved this line and the poem. A very poignant vision
ReplyDeleteAnd though my verse
ReplyDeletewas good enough
for one short night, love these lines :)
The one night stand for one and happily ever after for another does not pair well. good piece
The one night stand for one and happily ever after for another does not pair well. much depth, good write :)
ReplyDeleteNice, song-like quality
ReplyDeleteWas her name Ruby Tuesday, perchance?
ReplyDeleteThis beautiful James I was about to like it but see you haven't that option. Such an elegance and honesty wonderfully done
ReplyDeleteYep get those warnings but few rarely take heed, love the last lines. Nice song quality to it as well.
ReplyDeleteOh...so sad! But at least, if but for a moment, this poor soul felt worthy enough to act on the passion. Many of us dance through life without even the courage to try. Imagine the missed moments of magic! Another wonderful, wonderful write that takes my imagination so way beyond the obvious! Thank you :) (And another PERFECT pic as well!)
ReplyDeleteyou have a great way with words.
ReplyDeleteMy first visit to your blog - very lovely post.
ReplyDeleteI am always interested in a man's point of view of relationship. And no, it was not a wasted week!